I came up with my title, but I may change it.
The main characters are:
Willow: a witch (girl)
Calvin: a vampire (guy)
Jona: a vampire (guy)
Ivy: a vampire (girl)
Jule: a witch (girl)
Dusk: a werewolf (girl)
Hunter: warlock (guy)
Herring: a vampire (girl)
Piper: a werewolf (guy)
Gem: a witch (girl)
Spencer: a warlock (guy)
I'll post what they look like soon(:
Thanks for your help!
eclipsewatcher, this is fantastic! I really want to read more, the characters are brilliant and how you are introducing them all so we get to know them is fantastic.
The only thing that I thought when reading was in ch 3 the speech Calvin gives could be broken up a little, just a line of action in the middle of it. I hope you don't mind the suggestion, I do not mean to offend because it truly is brilliant, but I know I appreciate feedback for my writing! I can't wait for ch 5!
eclipsewatcher(: said:CHAPTER 4
I snarled as I walked down the hallway, slamming open my brother's door.
He was sitting in the window seat, staring at the sky."Jona." he growled, still staring outside.
I rushed at him, and he suprised me by moving to the bed just before my hand crushed his arm.I glared and paused in my rampage."You've been hunting?" I asked, curiousity tainting my rage."Don't seem so suprised, brother." Calvin mocked.I charged at him again and he dodged my hands, moving from the bed to the closet.I glared again."Why?" I demanded.Calvin growled again."Of course I expected another cage match." He was in my face before I could do anything.I ran to his desk and grabbed a pen, turning and stabbing him deep in his side as he appeared.He gasped in pain and fell to the carpeted floor.I leaned down and grabbed a handful of his hair, grinning evily."Never forget, little brother, I.Am.Stronger." I slammed his head against the floor and released his hair."Enjoy your classes." I added, heading out the door.
I caught the eye of a cute blonde girl, a witch, and I could tell by her horrified expression that she both knew Calvin and had heard the whole thing.
I waved and smiled wickedly.
I LOVEEE THIS=D!!! ITS FANTASTIC!!!THANKS 4 POSTING SOMEMORE!!!CANT WAIT 4 THE REST!!!
Still loving it! The characters are all so good!
eclipsewatcher(: said:CHAPTER 5
My mouth hung open as I watched Jona flash me a smug, arrogant, evil smile.
And then, unthinkingly, I ran, really ran, to Calvin's room.He was on the floor, holding his side and twisting in anguish."Calvin!" I gasped, kneeling beside him, my hands hovered above him, unsure if I would hurt him trying to help."Can I help you up?" I spluttered, shocked.What exactly had Jona done?!
He nodded slightly, and I reached and gripped his hand, helping him wobble over to his bed, where he collapsed and gasped in pain again.I just stared, my mouth still hung open like the idiot I so often was.
"What can I do?" I demanded, worried for his life at this point.Calvin managed to croak, "Nothing.I'm....w....eak." I glared now, because his expression, atleast what I could make out from beneath the terrible pain, was showing that he was hiding something.
"What can I do?" I persisted.Unable to speak now, he just shook his head once.I gritted my teeth."Something." I knew that much.
"It's no good, it...won't...help you." Calvin gasped."Help me!" I yelled."Stop worrying about me, Calvin!What can I do to help you?!"
He shook his head and glanced at me in horror again.
And then I understood what he meant."Blood." I whispered, my lips not moving.
Calvin nodded once.
He needed to have human blood, or atleast....half human...."I'll do it." I told him, meeting his eyes."I'm not...asking...it's too dangerous...for...y-" I hushed him and pointed to my wrist.
Calvin was stubborn, even in the middle of such pain, his jaw locked.I glared, and pressed my wrist to his lips, trying to force his mouth to open.
And so it went like that for a long while.
Finally, finally he gave in and I felt a sharp pain in my wrist, two identical little knives pressing into my veins.
I gasped aloud, the pain was unbelieveable for an instant, and then I just felt...strange.